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Some individuals argue people should buy only local products rather than foreign products. do you agree or disagree

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Some individuals argue people should buy only local
products
 than foreign
products
. I totally agree with
this
 idea. Because it is really useful for regional companies' progress.
Firstly
, a bunch of local
products
 cheaper than foreign
products
. Because road costs always add to
products
' price.
Morover
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Moreover
 some
of
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foreign
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the foreign
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products
 are inexpensive.
Secondly
,
community
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the community
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 should
spent
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 their money
for
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on
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 their motherland. Because if people spend their oof for
foreign
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the foreign
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 county. it is
benefical
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beneficial
 for another land.
For instance
,after The
Second
 World War
Japanese
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 community did not buy external productions. It was
extremly
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extremely
 useful for increasing as well as for people. In
conclution
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conclusion
, I opine that buying
local
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the local
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 product the most useful for developing country and community. But some
of
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cheap
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the cheap
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 foreign
products
 are better
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than
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that
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than
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 motherland
products
.
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