You recently received a letter from a friend asking for your advice on whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/ she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: say why she will not enjoy going to college explain why getting a job is a good idea Suggest the type of job that would be suitable.

Dear Manager, I hope
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message finds you well. I am writing to request your permission to deliver a short presentation based on the insights I gained during a recent conference I attended at one of our client’s companies. The presentation would focus on advanced software tools and techniques that the client uses to boost their productivity and workflow efficiency. I believe these strategies could benefit our team as well. The session
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approximately 30 to 35 minutes and will highlight key features, practical applications, and comparisons with our current systems. I would
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like to request that my colleague Deep assist me in preparing and delivering the session, as he is already familiar with some of the software tools discussed at the conference. If possible, I suggest we hold the presentation on May 30th, after lunch, in the conference room. I believe it would be beneficial for all team members to attend. Thank you for considering my request. I look forward to your approval and any suggestions you might have. Yours sincerely,
Jemish
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Make sure to provide a clear reason for each point you make. This will make your letter stronger.
coherence and cohesion
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Your greeting and closing are polite and appropriate.
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Your content is relevant and provides useful information.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic pressures
  • financial burdens
  • tuition
  • student loans
  • uncertainty
  • work experience
  • earn money
  • practical skills
  • professional network
  • align with interests
  • growth opportunities
  • on-the-job training
  • apprenticeships
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