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some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Learning is an ongoing process depending on someone's willingness and area of interest. It has been argued that books are the only
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 of learning a language and can inculcate the power of imagination in comparison with TV. But, I do not agree with the notion and believe both these sources are equally helpful in bringing out the best qualities in a person. Considering the reading part, it would be unjust to say that reading can not help in making a person more intellectual because, in the golden era, in which technology was not developed, books were the only
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 of knowledge to gain about a language, history, and art.
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, people in those times were highly educated and knowledgeable. One of the best examples is the theories of science that
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 developed years ago by scientists
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 impossible to discover without the help of books.
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, television is an equally powerful
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 in making people, especially, youngsters more creative.
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, it does not only make them innovative but, improves their observation power.
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, all those animated programs that are telecasted on
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 engage kids in a way that they start imagining characters and learn a lot from those stories.
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, television now has a number of programs in different languages that help individuals learn foreign languages and make them multilingual. In conclusion, anyone can be creative irrespective of the
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 one is learning from. In order to know about a language or anything, one needs to be dedicated to learning about the skills through any material or
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