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Some museums and art galleries charge admission fees, while others have free entry. Do you think the advantages of charging for admission outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Normally, an
exhibition
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 in
meseums
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museums
 and
art
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galleries
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 are held for the enjoyment of all members of society. With it is
increasement
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increment
, management of some
mesuems
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museums
charges
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 entrance fees to see an
exhibition
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 while others provide it at free of cost. According to my point of view charging for
an
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entry
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 in museums and
art
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galleries
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 have merits
outweigh
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that outweigh
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 it is drawbacks. There are cogent reasons behind it and I will discuss
it
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them
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 in the following paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, the
first
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 and foremost cause for putting
entry
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charges
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 for an
exhibition
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 in a museum is
the
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maintenance.
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, if the management of an
art
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gallery
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 put
entry
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charges
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 for an
exhibition
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,
then
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 it can maintain the entire cost of it is arrangements. It can pay utility bills
such
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 as electric, water and staff bills. By doing
this
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, it will provide profit to the
art
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gallery
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 and
this
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 can become a reason to collect more equipment.
Secondly
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, few committees of
art
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galleries
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 and museums work for fund expansions. They collect money in the shape of admission fees in order to help the orphanage, old age homes, schools in remote areas and so on.
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 of it, a needy camp of our society can gain gladness in their life.
On the other hand
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, the giant drawback of charging an
entry
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 fee is that the poor members of society are unable to afford to
visit
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 these places. Their human beings hardly earn their bread and do not have sufficient money for paying
charges
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 to enter a museum or
art
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gallery
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.
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, only rich persons come to
visit
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 there who are might be few in numbers. So, it can lead to a loss for
such
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as
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places beyond the arrival of low standard mankind. To conclude, I believe an entrance costs to
visit
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 an
art
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gallery
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 or other similar kinds of place is good and it wants to help learners, disable person, orphan children and so on. Only for
this
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, people have to
visit
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such
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 as places but only there which
art
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galleries
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 or museums do work in order to help someone.
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