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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

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Currently,
computers
 are being a part of education. A number of people say that
this
 is a disadvantageous trend,
however
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 others contend that it is leading to the advantageous outcome. In my view, using a computer during
lessons
 can have an adverse influence on studies. As for the former view, some regard technology should not be used at
lessons
. It can distract
students
' attention. Because pupils are interested in modern technology and
also
 they want to play games when they use
computers
 at
lessons
.
Furthermore
,
students
 are passionate about playing online games which are in trend. Another factor is that it may aggravate their vision in the long run. Pupils tend to spend much time at school, so
that is
 the reason why is that they sit in front of the screen. After ,that they feel exhausted and they tend to attach vision glasses. In that case, some people dislike using
computers
 during
lessons
. Moving to positives, in
this
 decade using technologies are becoming popular. School should be equipped with ultra-modern
computers
. As long as
students
 should be used
computers
 during
lessons
 for searching useful information. Some people think that it is an effective way to improve
students
' outlook.
As a result
, they want to study hard. Another reason is that they can learn a new thing by themselves. If they do not understand theories they can find out information easier than books. In that case, they can save their time and money. In conclusion, I believe that
computers
 play a great role to find data and learning faster
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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