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With growing populations in cities, more and more people live in homes with little or no outdoor space. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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With the increase in urban masses, many
people
 reside in limited space not by choice but due to scarcity. There is hardly any scope for recreational
activities
, in
this
 essay, I will highlight some of the demerits of living in a large city.
To begin
 with, big
cities
 provide ample
of
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opportunities in terms of job, ease of access to basic amenities & other social security measures.
This
 attracts many
people
 from rural areas which in turn increases the burden on city infrastructure leaving no room for open land.
For instance
, in the
last
 couple of decade major
cities
 in India have been overpopulated and there has been a manifold increase in the migration of
people
 from small town to big
cities
.
This
 adds pressure on the city administration to provide shelter to all the
people
 by cutting down trees and farmlands.
Furthermore
, kids have a more vulnerable impact from
this
 as they tend to live in smaller space like flat. There are few or no open parks for them to play and get involved in physical
activities
 which is crucial for their development. Many youngsters spend time on screen to compensate for their outdoor
activities
. As per the latest study, average small kids spend daily three to four hours in front of either computer or mobile devices which ultimately have a negative impact on their eyes and brain.
As a result
, the youth of today’s generation has
tend
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 to gain weight and become lazy which affects their overall health. To summarise,
cities
 should unquestionably have open places for recreational and physical
activities
 which is a need of the hour. In order to avoid excessive burden on
cities
 administration should develop other small
cities
 and provide basic facilities along with job and security measures which will result in a decrease in migration of masses and ultimately benefitting larger towns.
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