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In recent  years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. What are the changes occuring?Do you think these changes are positive or negative?Give reasons for your enswer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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Over the past few years, the traditional formation of family and household character has transformed. The modifications created new forms of family and role adjustments. Based on my personal opinion, I understand these developments as positive progression and I will support my point of
this
 view below. The conventional family form is facing transformations thanks to natural societal appeal. It is partly caused by the high financial demand to support all family needs. Apart from
this
, we are reaching the point where essential and unthinkable change
such
 as coequality in same-sex marriages has come to its highest in human history.
As a result
, in many, cases the pressure on the nuclear form is turning into a blended form or family by the choice build. Naturally, that engender role changes. The pay equality between the man and the woman is a great example. In the past traditional family, the man's role was as a breadwinner, but
this
 is in many contemporary families passed on to a woman. As a matter of fact, the intense calling for equality in all aspects
such
 as gender pay, but
also
 the openness to homosexual marriages and their rights to become father, mother proved our flexibility. I believe that
this
 is resulting in positiveness in society. There are currently 29 countries with legalized gay marriages that authorize adoption for these couples. A great example of
this
 is countries as Australia, Germany and Malta. To conclude, all the above mentioned are the result of our sociological transformations. There is no doubt that gender equality, flexibility and openness are the key factors for a successful new family structure.
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