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All education and healthcare should be funded by the government and free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Education and healthcare is an imperative part of every nation. Masses believe that it should be free of cost and should be funded by a regime of every country. I partially agree with
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 notion, because anything which is free of cost become valueless.
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 essay will articulate both the views along with my perception.
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 with, every citizen has equal rights to gain the benefits of education and health
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, the government need
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 to provide various
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.
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, to complete the needs of the public, the majority of
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 comes from industries, healthcare and educational sectors.
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, according to a Harvard University report, in the UK health sectors provide 27 per cent
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 to the ruling regime. The
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government
 can provide healthcare insurance to an in100re by the government may affect the economic cycle of the country.
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, some
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 believe that many below the poverty line masses don't get proper education and proper health
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. So to give a biased
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, the government should provide free
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 to everyone.
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 rich
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 want better
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, there should be equal distribution of
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 between high class and low-class
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. To sum up, in my I partially agree to above give topic. The
goverment
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government
 should provide free insurance packages and educational
services
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 to the needy and
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 take
taxes
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 from high-class
people
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 to balance the economy of the nation.
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