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Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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In today’s time, travelling to other
countries
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 has become a passion for
people
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 all around the world. Few argue that
countries
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 being travelled to may have detrimental impacts. As per my opinion, I completely disagree with
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 viewpoint, as
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 travels will help their economies to boost up and will support them to grow in many ways rather than having a wrong impact on
countries
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 being travelled to.
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my
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 opinion in depth.
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tourism
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the tourism
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 sector is crucial for many economies around the world and contributes well
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 raising income for their nation. As government benefits most out of them, travellers
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 support in providing employment opportunities for many local
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 which in turn helps them to earn their livelihood.
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, in places like GOA and KASHMIR in
INDIA
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 most of the population earn their livelihood from travellers by providing services to them like accommodation, food, various activities and much more.
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,
countries
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 being travelled to are benefited the most.
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,
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 assists in the expansion of cultural integrity and values. As travellers move around, they adapt cultural and
tradition
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 values of the
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 around them
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 and
also
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 leave their tradition in many places which promote integrity and acceptance.
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, many tourists prefer to eat their own respective cuisines to avoid health issues so to cater
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this
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 need their respective food is adapted
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tourist’s
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the tourist’s
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 destination.
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, cultural acceptance
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 spreads
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through
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tourism
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. To conclude,
tourism
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 should always be considered as a positive development for the
countries
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 as it increases
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financial growth, helps in economic development and support local
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 by eradicating poverty.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchanges
  • Global connections
  • Tourism boosts
  • Local economy
  • Over-tourism
  • Environmental degradation
  • Landmarks
  • Commodification of culture
  • Authentic cultural expressions
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Tourism infrastructure
  • Public services
  • Disrespect local customs
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