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Obesity was once considered a disease of adults; however, it is becoming increasingly common among children. Why do you think this is happening? What can be done to help children stay healthy?

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 earlier it was thought by many that obesity is an illness that mostly affects
grown-up
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the grown-up
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 population, nowadays it impacts more and more
children
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. Massive
junk
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food
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 advertising is believed to be the cause of the problem.
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, from my point of view,
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 measures as restricting
this
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 kind of advertising should be taken into account. The foremost reason for
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the underage
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 overweight issue can be the
high-levels
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high levels
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 of child-targeted commercials of
food
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 high in sugar, salt and fats,
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 as fast
food
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, sugary drinks, and candy. Not only do
food
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 marketers use offline marketing, be it television, billboards, or posters but they
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 use online
one
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 as well,
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 incorporating all possible sources of communication. Recent research has shown that advertising can significantly influence
food
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 preferences, especially in young
children
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 under 10 years old due to viewing ads as unbiased sources of information and
inability
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the inability
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 to critically respond to marketing. Being highly influential,
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 sophisticated promotion of
junk
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food
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 can easily undermine parent’s efforts to help their
children
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 eat
healthy
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. The most effective solution to
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 problem, from my point of view, would be
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the government’s
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 restricting marketing of foods high in sugars, salt and fats, especially those aimed at
children
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 and teenagers. Rarely do people realize that excessive weight is a global problem and
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 it should be tackled on the state level. Having restricted
junk
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food
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 advertising, the government would limit its harmful impact on the public and
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 would help to ensure the health of the entire nation in the long run.
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, some of the
world leading
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 countries,
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 as Canada, Norway, and Great Britain, were able to lower the
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children
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childhood
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 obesity rate significantly by enforcing law restrictions to
junk
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food
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 ads targeting persons under 18. In conclusion, I am strongly convinced that were it not for being bombarded by youth-targeted
food
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 advertising,
children
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 would not massively suffer from diet-related illnesses.
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,
this
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 issue should be tackled by the government using law enforcement restrictions of
food
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-focused broadcast advertising and other child-targeted marketing techniques.
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