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Writing Samples
Band 6

You have recently noticed and increase in traffic in your residential area. Write a letter to the responsible person at the local council to inform him about the problem and say - Introduce yourself and describe the problem - What are the reasons for the traffic in your view - Suggest a solution to the problem.

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Dear Sir, I hope
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 letter finds you well. I am a resident of Ward 16. I am writing
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 letter in context to
rise
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the rise
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 in vehicular
traffic
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 in the B- Block, Model Town area
from
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for
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 a few days, which is bothering locals and causing mishaps
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 as accidents. There has been an increase in the number of vehicles in
city
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the city
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from
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for
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a
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the
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 past couple of years, but we never witnessed any trouble apart from
traffic
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 jams. In my viewpoint,
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 problem
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started
from
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last
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 month, when
local
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the local
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 council sealed the Western Highway Bridge
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a
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repair work.
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 bridge connects
main
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 city to the National Highway 45, which is considered one of the busy routes in Ludhiana. In order to, solve the issue, I would like to propose a few solutions.
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, kindly deploy
traffic
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 police
personals
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, who can handle the influx of
traffic
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 during peak hours.
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, kindly put a halt to the heavy vehicles movement during
day
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the
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 time, which could ease the problem to some extent. I hope you will look into the matter personally and I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jatinder.
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coherence cohesion
To enhance coherence, you could provide a more detailed explanation of how the suggested solutions can specifically alleviate the traffic problem.
task achievement
Ensure that your letter is concise but detailed, focusing more specifically on each proposed solution and how it directly addresses the problem stated.
task achievement
The introduction clearly establishes the purpose of the letter and identifies the problem succinctly.
suitable writing tone
The letter maintains a respectful and formal tone, appropriate for communication with a local council.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, making the letter easy to follow.
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