Nowadays, there are fewer tranquil and calm places that allow us a quiet space to think. What do you think are the main reasons for this? Do you believe that such places are necessary these days? Why/Why not?

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all the places are congested plus that more people means more cars and

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spotting a peaceful site is more like the impossible.

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nature or maybe do Yoga is not an additional thing as many humans believe it is an essential thing in order to live a healthy mental life.

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can impact our performance at work and how we deal with the people around us.

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gravity when he was meditating. In conclusion,

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Nowadays, there are fewer tranquil and calm places that allow us a quiet space to think. What do you think are the main reasons for this? Do you believe that such places are necessary these days? Why/Why not?

Your opinion

A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter: explain what you are currently doing describe your suitability for this area of work say when you can attend an interview

Giving lectures in halls to large numbers of people is an outdated method of teaching. With the technology available today, there is no justification for it and everything should be done online. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some parents and teachers think that children’s behavior should be strictly controlled. While some think that children should be free to behave. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Learning English at schools is often seen as more important than local languages. If these are not taught many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it more important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure survival of local languages and if so, how?

Full-time university students need to spend most of their time studying. Some people, however, claim that students needed to be involved in other activities as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?