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In many countries, people decide to have a child at a later age. Why is this? Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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In a global, most
of
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the
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married
couple
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couples
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planning
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 a baby
at
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after some period of time.
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, there are more reasons behind
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.Despite its few benefits for younger
couple
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,the recent evidence has brought a number of problems that must be addressed. In the recent survey conducted by ,
governments
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 officials from the health department on the population who got recently married.
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,couples are not interested in
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 a baby boy or girl immediately after a new journey
started
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.They are interested in understanding their feelings,in ,addition
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 to express love in a kind of routine
ways
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.
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, they can easily continue their studies or
carrier
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careers
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 to reach their goals in a smoother way.Some nation mostly postpones youngster planning for
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 life .In short, having a baby later
time
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 has become good for a few nations.
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, in modern life , cultural families
are having
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 different food habits not in a proper timing manner.These could cause many well-being points
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 planning an infant in future.
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,women generally
facing
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trouble in regular periods, including thyroid
complication
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.Despite
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,for getting pregnant so many implications could occur.An example,
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having
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 sugar and high blood pressure
concern
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,there are very few chances of getting pregnant.All these
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many implications present a clear threat to society but will not prevent folk from having
genetic
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 energy dilemma. In conclusion, planning children at some other time has brought minor benefits for
few
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a few
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crowd
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.Despite
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,more community
having
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well-being
matter
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 outweigh the advantages.
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Although
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,taking precautions in their individual fitness control and
help
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society
getting
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 pregnant with high number criteria.

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Your opinion

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