In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree

Nowadays,there are many different
schools
such
as single-gender
schools
and mix-
schools
all over the world, so that parents could choose which kind of
schools
that their kids should go into. Some people hold the opinion fo
this
if the kids went to the single-gender
school
might have negative effects in their
future
. In my point of view, I would say I disagree with
this
. There are several reasons to support my view.
To begin
with, I know many people they are graduated from single-sex
school
,
however
, most of them are doing excellent in life.
For example
, one of my friends now is in her early 50. she graduated from femail
school
32 years ago , and she has a wonderful life. She gets a good job and had some excellent achievements in her life after
school
Such
as she married a good man, has promoted to be a
siner
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singer
sinner
manager in her job and
also
she became a captain in a golf club.
Moreover
, I believe children who graduated from single-sex
school
have more achievements in their
future
because the single-sex
school
provide the best environment for the students.
For example
, it avoids the students get into boys and girls relationship too early
thus
they can more focus on what they studying, as a
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the children who graduated in single-sex
school
have better
future
especially for them to gain the hight knowledge for the present days requested. To sum up, I believe that if the children who graduated in single-sex
schools
have more advantages in their
future
than in mix-sex
school
.
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