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Government should spend more on railways than roads. Do you agree or disagree with the statement.?

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In our modern world today, the government is faced with problems regarding smooth transportation or journey. It is believed by some
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 that higher authorities must spend more money or effort on
railways
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 than
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. I certainly believe in
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 statement. Our everyday routine as persons in
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 busy world is indeed tough, especially for those unwealthy nations wherein their form of transportation is yet to be improved. If the government give more importance to
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, our traffic concern will be reduced.
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 it helps to promote accessibility to our place of work or to universities.
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 faster speed and saves time for busy
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. It
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 implies a convenient journey wherein
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 be able to sit without congestion or exhaustion.
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 help to hasten the air pollution caused by smoke-belching vehicles. Construction of
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 indeed imposed more expenses but definitely gives a long-lasting benefit to a country.
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, the government has the responsibility to provide smooth and well-functioning
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 for
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 but not as important as the construction of
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.
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 are important yet these are the continuous concern of mankind. Every year , most
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 are repaired due to some climate changes like floods. In urban areas, some
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 are so inconvenient and do not promote safety for travellers, causing only accidents and disturbances to all motorist. In conclusion,
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 are more beneficial to humans. Not only it promotes safety and convenience but it can help alleviate air pollution in some congested areas.
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