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In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. Discuss both systems and state one do you think is better?

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In certain nations,
parents
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 arrange marriages for their
children
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 but in other instances,
one
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 is allowed to choose their partners.
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parents
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 want the best for their
children
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, they should allow them to be with people they are in
love
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 with.
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One
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one
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 hand, marriages that
parents
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 arrange for their
children
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 is due to the long life experience they have been in
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 for them to have the best. Due to the fear of being disappointed ,
parents
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 are curious, making them go overboard to choose spouses for their
children
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 that they believe will not bring them to pain.
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 Durma community in Kenya, no
one
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 is allowed to be married out of the clan and is the duty of
parents
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 to search and give partners to their
children
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.
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, I believe
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 has brought
alot
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a lot
lot
 of physical abuse and divorces for lack of
love
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 and compatibility.
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, being able to get yourself a husband or wife is the best thing by a fact that marriage is a
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lifetime
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life time
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 affair ,
one
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 should choose the
one
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 they truly
love
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. No couple is an accident,
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, two can only walk together unless they agree and
love
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 is
one
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 of the agreement.
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, most successful stories about marriage are based on
love
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 worldwide. By that , I tend to believe that, being able to be with the
one
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 you
love
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 is
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 thing. In conclusion, no
one
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 should be given a spouse but let everyone have the freedom to get by themselves whom they
love
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Arranged marriage
  • Love marriage
  • Autonomy
  • Cultural compatibility
  • Family support
  • Emotional connection
  • Individual freedom
  • Life experience
  • Practical decisions
  • Social compatibility
  • Economic compatibility
  • Mutual affection
  • Unity
  • Stability
  • Wisdom
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