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the number of students studying science is constantly declining. what do you think are the causes and effects on our society.

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Science
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,
such
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 as astronomy and biology, is of paramount importance
knowldege
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knowledge
 to learn by
people
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, regardless of their age and level of education. These days, the number of pupils who are learning
science
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subject
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 at school is decreasing at an alarming rate.
This
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 essay will discuss the cause of
this
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trend
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 and its impact
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 the citizen.
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, one of the
cause
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 of
this
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 phenomenon is the emergence of new occupations which are considered more appealing. By and large, there is a myriad of novel professions
which
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 are considered
required
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 less effort in the modern world
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now days
nowdays
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. Take social media influencer which is currently mushrooming in my country as an example. In fact,
people
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 only requires
an excellent intrapersonal skills
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, which are often considered easier to
learned
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 than
science
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.
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, more and more young generation tend to have less interest in studying
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 and prefer to learn communication skills
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.
Moreover
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,
science
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 is considered
as
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 complex
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 to learn by some
people
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. Generally speaking, it
is often involves
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aplethora
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a plethora
 of formulas and unfamiliar names which are difficult to understand easily by
student
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.
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, in chemistry
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, young
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are insist
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 to remember the different names of liquid substances.
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,
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 condition
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 children nowadays less interested in learning
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science
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further
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. Obviously, there are some detrimental impacts presented by the decline of interest in exploring
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subject
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 in
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society. One of them is there would be less invention in the future because many young
generation
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generations
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 put their interest in another school subjects,
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 as arts. Clearly, a lot of extraordinary findings
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invented in the past are mostly contributed by
science
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. Perhaps a good example of
this
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 is the electric lamp, which invented by Sir Thomas Alva Edison in the 19th century. Another adverse effect is there would be no
science
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 at school curriculum.
In other words
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,
science
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subject
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 would eventually
vanished
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 in the near future since there would be no
people
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 who would like to pursue a degree in
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science
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 program.
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 demand,
however
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, would eventually reduce a significant number
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science
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 teachers and establish a zero demand in studying
science
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 in the future. All in all,
science
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 is currently experiencing a downward
trend
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 in its popularity nowadays. The appearance of novel and promising job
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career
 and the complexity of the
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are
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considerend
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considered
 the main causes of
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trend
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. If
this
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trend
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 is going to continue, there would be
lack
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on
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 invention and extinction of
science
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 in the
long-run
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long run
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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