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People attend colleges or universities for many different reasons for example, new experience, career preparation, increased knowledge etc. why do you think people attend colleges or universities?

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young people learn and experience in their universities due to different reasons.
Although
 most of these students want to upgrade themselves, personally I believe that there are other problems that lead young society to follow an educational path without any interest. On the one hand, individuals follow their interests to become professional on that. It means that, if a person wants to be successful in his job, he or she must have a great deal with its academic path.
In addition
, if we improve our knowledge and learn it academically, we will have fewer mistakes, which boost our chance of success.
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, most of the time learning a specific subject is a productive way to have a high-salary profession. It is obvious, whenever employers want to employ and develop their employees, they looking for a person who has a great degree in that career. As result, a wide range of professional opportunities are offered to them and they choose their loyal job more easily than the others based on their needs.
On the other hand
, some of the students are sent to colleges or universities with some negative aspects. In today's world, many teenagers are under the parent's pressure for having a high educational degree without any attention to their children's interests.
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, some of the skilled young people have been sent to education places who have great talent in some other subjects which need any classrooms ,
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 is sent to these places to follow and improve their personal skills. But some of them study their subjects without any interest.
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