The two maps illustrate how Tempton, a seaside resort, developed in a period of thirteen years, from 2000 to 2013.

The two maps illustrate how Tempton, a seaside resort, developed in a period of thirteen years, from 2000 to 2013.
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The two maps illustrate how Tempton, a seaside resort, developed in a period of thirteen years, from 2000 to 2013.
Overall
,
This
village witnessed several changes, the most noticeable concern
the
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replacement of many
trees
and
houses
with blocks of flats and the
added
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of facilities and infrastructures. In 2000 there were many
houses
in a residential area, in the
south-west
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southwest
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of the
river
, just in front of the sea,
numerous
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trees
and only one block of flats.
Also
at the
north-west
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northwest
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of the
river
and around the lake
was
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were
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located a few
houses
and
trees
.
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the
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thirteen years later, along the
seariver
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server
sea river
in the south-west,
trees
and small buildings were replaced by two other towering
bloks
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blocks
of flats, and on the opposite side of a small new road, it was built a supermarket.
Similarly
, in the
north-west
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northwest
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of the
river
, some
trees
were cut down and
houses
removed for the construction of several buildings.
Also
in
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on
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the
est
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east
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side of the
river
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,river
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there were some important changes,
in particular
, in 2000 there were the school and hospital buildings,
trees
everywhere and a railway station.
While
in 2013 every tree was chopped down, was added the airport in the south, just
next
to the
river
, a factory in the north, rather,
hospital
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a hospital
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and school
was remained
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remained
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there.
Furthermore
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the railway was extended, running along the coast,
also
a ferry service was placed in the south-east of the resort.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words trees, houses, river with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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