Television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well educated today. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Did
technology
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Era decrease children
learning
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capacity? Are they less educated than
previous
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generation because of
television
? I do not
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. In
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essay, I will outline reasons to support my opinion and explain my point of view.
To begin
with, after
development
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of
internet
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, education has been trying to embrace tech tools aiming to diversify the way of studying. To illustrate
this
, one case in point would be my father, as a teacher, has noticed that primary school children were having access to smartphones, already.
Hence
, since those machines are constantly present
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daily life, allying them to methods of teaching
were
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an attempt to turn
studying
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activity more interesting to generation alpha kids, who are born knowing how to call Siri and ask anything they need. In stark
constrast
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contrast
,
although
, I do believe
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using
television
associated with reading would assist toddlers
towards
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learning
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process,
this
phenomenon is not an excuse to transform
television
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a sort of surrogate book. Quoting one of RuPaul's Drag Race most iconic phrases, reading is fundamental. As an active action, picking a book and reading it stimulate brain areas and connections profoundly, leading information to long-term memory more effectively than in movie viewers, who relish
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a
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passive action. Indeed,
television
cannot replace books, and,
conversely
, books cannot replace
television
. I do not consider today's children schooling system deficient comparing to boomers' education at their time. In conclusion,
television
and books cannot replace one another, and kids are not less educated today than generations before,
therefore
, the benefits of using those elements together outweigh the benefits of using them individually.
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