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Some people believe that companies should manufacture products that last for a long time. Others feel that the emphasis should be placed on producing goods that are cheap. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In
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today's
today
todays
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today's
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 globalisation, manufacturing
goods
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 does not survive for
long
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a long
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 time which became a debatable topic in our society. While others
tends
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 to
beleive
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believe
 that low
price
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goods
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 must give a preference. In
this
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essay
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,essay
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i
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I
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 would like to explain my point of view and focus on both pros and cons of
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 topic.
Firstly
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, some individuals like to purchase branded
things
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 and it became their passion
now a days
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nowadays
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. So, by using the particular
things
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 daily they become obsessed
to
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it
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them
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. If suddenly the product damage and they cannot use it as they
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buy
buyed
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bought
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 it costly which leads them to irritate and make life miserable.
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, One of
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friend
freind
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my freind
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use
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 the expensive branded belt for his work
everyday
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 to look professional attire.
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, one day belt was
teared
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torn
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 due to usage for few months due to
this
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 my friend stop using to
wear
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itwear
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. In his view companies are not makings
goods
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 in a quality manner as they are not living
long
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a long
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 life. On
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the other
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other
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another
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 side of view, some people perspectives regarding
goods
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 which are
in
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at
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cheap
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a cheap
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price
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 are too good for use and
also
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 long living with affordable
price
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.
Moreover
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, they think that
cheapest
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the cheapest
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price
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 does not make
concern
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a concern
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 if they left us in between by damaging or stop working as they gave a reasonable
price
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 for that.
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, I brought my
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handbag
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hand bag
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handbag
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 for a cheap
price
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 and used
quite
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it quite
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 often after
few
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a few
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 days bag was damaged and it doesn't bother me as
i
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I
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 brought it for
low
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a low
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price
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 and used it well. In conclusion,
i
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I
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 want to state that low
price
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goods
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 are too good rather than buying branded costliest
things
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.
Things
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which
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that
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 are cheaper does not mean that they are bad
infact
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in fact
 they
dont
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don't
 have
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a
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logo name
thats
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that
that's
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i
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I
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dont
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don't
 care about that status of wearing branded
things
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.
Furthermore
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, cheap
things
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 are
best
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the best
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things
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 and long
surving
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serving
surviving
surfing
 for us.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • disposable goods
  • economic benefits
  • frequent replacements
  • technological adaptation
  • manufacturing affordability
  • environmental responsibility
  • longevity
  • minimize costs
  • wider society
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