Many doctors say that people in today's world do not do enough physical exercise. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions are there to this problem?

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The issue of body movement has become a highly considerable topic in

modern

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era. Though human

are

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unwilling to do

this

, it has noticeable benefits in our life. In

this

eassy

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essay

easy

, I will discuss why we are not habituated to do

such

activities which are essential for health and recommended by physicians. And what can be done to solve the problem

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To begin

with, doing some extra bodily activities is important for us.But

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this

time,

people

firmly disagree with

this

fact. There is a number of reasons behind

this

disagreement. Perhaps, the

first

cause of avoiding physical

exercise

is the modern lifestyle. The way we are living, we totally depend on technology.

For instance

, nowadays,

people

do not need to walk. Even a short distance can be passed by

vehicle

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Besides

this

, lots of difficult works are done by machinery tools. And so human have been workshy which are the main cause why folks do not do any kind of physical workout.

The another

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reason is insufficient free places. Having a tiny space for walking or warming up, humans can not be able to make proper

exercise

For example

, in many towns or cities,

people

do not have any park or field to do

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movement. Every problem has a solution too. Some initiatives have to be taken to encourage ourselves for doing

exercise

Firstly

, awareness among

community

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the community

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should be taken. Young

people

should form

club

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a club

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or gym

center

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to do

workout

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the workout

a workout

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Secondly

, the consumption of machinery things

have

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to be reduced.

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as, for

short

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short-distance

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distance

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people

should not use transport.

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plethora

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a plethora

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of parks or playground

are

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needed to be formed up all over the country. To sum up, though there are lots of reason for being unhabituated to do

exercise

, we should focus on the solutions. If human

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able to lead a healthy life with proper

exercise

, it will be better for the nation too.

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