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‘Nowadays, news companies spend a lot of money covering international news. However, local news is more relevant to people’s lives and should receive more funding.’ To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Being updated seems to play an important role in modern society. To provide information, some broadcast players make more investments to cover overseas
news
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 than to report local
facts
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,
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 provoque enables some individuals to claim in favour of increasing the budget of local operations since it produces they produce more important content to people's lives. I tend to agree with that
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 because local
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 have
higher
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 and short-term impact on
population
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the population
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. Traffic and usually has a huge impact on our routines. Our busy life, with a full
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schedule
schedulle
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 has no space to
be spend
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 in a traffic jam and everyone would like to avoid being late for
a
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 appointment. Because of that, some radio stations provide
real time
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 information about the routes and most recent
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.
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, the popularity of
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 type of radio assure that people want to be aware of what is happening
arround
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around
 them. Our society is
fudamental
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fundamentally
fundamental
 based on living together. So be informed about local
facts
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increase
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 the feeling of belonging to a community, which empower individuals and may contribute to building
safer
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 place where each one takes care of another.
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, local information perhaps costs lower to be produced, so with the same amount of international investments
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 companies could
increase
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 covering and quality. To conclude,
infomation
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information
 is a central topic in our lives. Be informed about the most recent local
facts
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 might help us on short-term tasks,
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 as daily routines.
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 that, the
increase
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 of knowledge about local
news
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 can
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 contribute to
increase
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 safety and build a better place to live.
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