‘Nowadays, news companies spend a lot of money covering international news. However, local news is more relevant to people’s lives and should receive more funding.’ To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Being updated seems to play an important role in modern society. To provide information, some broadcast players make more investments to cover overseas
news
than to report local
facts
,
this
provoque enables some individuals to claim in favour of increasing the budget of local operations since it produces they produce more important content to people's lives. I tend to agree with that
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because local
facts
have
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and short-term impact on
population
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. Traffic and usually has a huge impact on our routines. Our busy life, with a full
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schedule
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has no space to
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in a traffic jam and everyone would like to avoid being late for
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appointment. Because of that, some radio stations provide
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information about the routes and most recent
news
.
Furthermore
, the popularity of
this
type of radio assure that people want to be aware of what is happening
arround
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around
them. Our society is
fudamental
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fundamentally
fundamental
based on living together. So be informed about local
facts
increase
the feeling of belonging to a community, which empower individuals and may contribute to building
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place where each one takes care of another.
Moreover
, local information perhaps costs lower to be produced, so with the same amount of international investments
news
companies could
increase
covering and quality. To conclude,
infomation
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information
is a central topic in our lives. Be informed about the most recent local
facts
might help us on short-term tasks,
such
as daily routines.
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that, the
increase
of knowledge about local
news
can
also
contribute to
increase
safety and build a better place to live.
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