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In you coutry, is there more need for land to be in its natural condition or to is there more need for land to be developed for housing and industry? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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In some countries, natural
resources
 are preserved well by local government and community. Unfortunately in other areas, it is started the building houses and major facilities.
To begin
 with, untouched nature is supposed to be conserved not only for humans but
also
 for animals living there. Some
people
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 preserving the natural condition of the
land
 by maintaining its
resources
. In the Philippines,
for instance
, there is a
place
 where local government take good care of
this
 wide scope of
land
 for the yearly festival.
Moreover
, the officials even donated monetary fund for maintenance and fertilization of the
land
. It is a well-visited
place
 in the country due to its natural
resources
 and
also
 a peaceful location. Politicians preserved the area for several years.
On the other hand
, most of the places in the country are started to develop and build more industry and houses.
For example
, in one of the cities in the Philippines, where it was known as a safe city, local officials financed the improvements of the said
place
.
Furthermore
, most of the vacant site before is now full of condominiums, shopping malls and other facilities which gives numerous jobs for the
people
.
However
, there is a
place
 that needs to be untouched not only for the advantages to human and animals but
also
 for nature. Even it is in its natural condition, it can still give more benefits to society.
In contrast
, living in the city is different. Mostly the primary goal of the public officials is to improve the living of
people
 where they lead. By developing more vacant
land
 for the construction of numerous accommodations and business industries which provide valuable benefits to the community. In conclusion, maintaining the natural
resources
 of the
land
 may be beneficial to society,
however
, developing more places can improve the lives of
people
 by giving more jobs to the community.
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