Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

It is undeniable that most of the countries have been suffered
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climate changes or some environmental
Problems
in todays. While some
people
think that biodiversity
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can
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the main environmental
problems
, others accept that there are some other natural
disasters
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can cause
environment
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problems
. In
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both views in detail and I would argue
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depletion of plants and living things.
Firstly
, there is no country
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doesn’t suffer from natural
disasters
in the
world
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, Japan, one of the countries in
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, locating
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Earthquake zone frequently suffers the earthquake almost in all places of
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.
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some countries are unable to avoid over raining or flood or sandstorms. Recently,
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has faced with
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sandstorm for two days and getting air pollution is in
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zone.
People
are aware the natural
disasters
as
this
cause the problem for our
environment
. Normally,
people
are getting
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from news about the environmental
problems
even though it did not happen in
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country.
Secondly
, global warming is the main problem of overusing the species in the
world
. Nowadays,
people
are accepting that fishing and, wearing
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clothes and Jewry which made of animals, are for their fun and exercise.
Moreover
, habitats have been destroyed for
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firm and for housing plans have caused
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one
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problems
for
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the environment
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. Not surprisingly, there will be carbon dioxide in our
environment
as most
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flora
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the flora
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are depleting and there is not enough time for species to rebirth again and plants to alive. There more we used flora and furan, the less we get the green
environment
. To conclude,
environment
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is the key for all of us to
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in
this
world
.
Therefore
, there should
be retain
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the
environment
not to damage from natural
disasters
and I highly
people
want to emphasise to maintain species and animals as
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case
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of environmental
problems
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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