some people believe that technology has man made more social. do you agree or disagre e.

Technology
has changed the whole face of communication along with provide different platforms to connect with each other with a single click on a screen.Few individuals
/
few echelons
/
strata of population opine
/
propound
/
reckon/ that advancement of automation has provided multifarious ways to communicate.I oppose
this
statement as personal interaction and emotional bondings are bringing down among
people
due to extra
dependent
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on social media.
This
essay will discuss the reasons with relevant examples why
i
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I
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am holding
this
view.
Initially
,hi-tech
technology
is creating a virtual world
which
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that
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has no real connection.
People
are attracting
towards
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to
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the
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apply
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social platforms and making connections with strangers, forgetting the actual relations with family.So, in difficult
circumtances
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circumstances
,a human
find
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finds
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himself aloof and getting no help from their networks.
For instance
,
facebook
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Facebook
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is becoming an addiction for all age group
people
which actually encouraging
people
to spend quality time on mobiles
/
social media which is weakening the bonding of actual relationships.
Hence
, social media is extincted the physical social gathering and inspire a human to live
a
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an
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isolated lifestyle.
Moreover
, advancement in
technology
have
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has
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made
people
show more interest in online life, but it made them forget about face to face interaction.
People
prefer to send
a
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an
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online greeting and wishes on festivals through social applications mode
instead
of visiting
to
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each other
this
is because they
beleive
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believe
to visit near and dear ones house
/
PLACE consume a lot of time which they
connsider
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consider
as a wastage of time
/
ENERGY AND
RECOURCES
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RESOURCES
.To exemplify, it has been seen in a survey that in present times
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AT PRESENT,
invitation
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an invitation
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for marriages and other celebrations send through
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NO NEED digital cards with
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THROUGH online mode to avoid
physically
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physical
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presence at other's home for communication.
As a result
,
celebration
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the celebration
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is celebrated to invite limited
people
and really making
people
less sociable. To conclude,
technology
is persuading a communication gap and
phsical
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physical
/
PHYSICAL meetings among
people
.Being sociable lies in sharing
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physical
phsical
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a phsical
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smile rather than a digital smiley.
Although
technology
is breaking down the
distane
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distance
barrier and give opportunities to
people
connect
/
CONNECT
PEOPLE
worldwide, it is encouraging
people
to not socialize in the real world and forgetting the real values and bonding with
familes
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families
family
.
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