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Today’s society provides people with various ways to lose weight, such as special diets or exercise regimes. Many people believe though that poor food and today’s lifestyle should be addressed first. What is your opinion?

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In the current era, with the recent advancements in the field of science has opened up a plethora of opportunities for fancy weight-loss programs and fitness classes;
however
 many people still hold the opinion that unhealthy eating habits and sedentary lifestyle are more pressing issues that should be dealt sooner rather than opting for special dietary plans and paying for hefty gym membership fees. We must acknowledge that in today's world, the majority of the people are in the mode of multi-tasking and usually spend an average of 12 or more hours a day at
work
therefore
 end up with very limited
time
 for personal care
thus
 looking for alternate
time
-saving options for food and often avoid to cook meals at home. To Illustrate, I have personally observed that around 90 per cent of my colleagues often eat lunch outside which is usually a high-calorie meal accompanied with sugary drinks.
Furthermore
, most people especially those who
work
 in multinational companies, often spend most of their
time
 in front of laptops
thus
 leading to a sedentary lifestyle and no physical exercise. In my opinion, we must
work
 collectively to change
this
 current situation and take some serious steps on improving the
work
-life balance by ensuring that we are blocking at least 30 minutes of our
time
 to engage ourselves in some kind of physical activity
such
 as going for a walk, running or spending
time
 outdoors.
Furthermore
, we should
work
 on healthy eating habits by incorporating fresh and balanced meals into our diet, learn new culinary skills, experiment with new dishes in the kitchen.
In particular
, I personally felt that cooking is a stress buster, some days of the week when I cook for myself and my family, I personally feel more relaxed and confident about my calorie intake. To encapsulate, not
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only intake of healthy, balanced and proportional meal size will help to decrease extra weight but
also
 physical exercise plays a vital role to stay in shape and shed a few extra pounds.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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