2. In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Rising crime in the world. It is having to be a very important
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in many countries. We need to find out how to win
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you.
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crime
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. In my opinion, the biggest
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people
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who do
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criminality is
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of money for their basic needs. You might say that all of them can find a
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to close the basic needs, and you will be right.
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of the
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have a profession and can find
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with enough salary. Another
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had
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in childhood and could not get educated.
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, the level of basic needs varies from person to person. The
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of
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could have a big family and some
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with their
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house and need to pay
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. Another
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could not have a family but have some problems with their health. Or
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they
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parents might have some problems with it, so they need to buy expensive medicaments. Of course, no one from the
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not want to be
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homeless, so they are going to do some crime to get
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quick money in a short time. Now we need to ask ourselves what steps can be taken to minimize
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the criminal
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rate in our society. I think, the families who do not
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enough money for themselves have to go to rallies against the government. Politicians must accept social laws to help the
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to find the
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, to help with their children education, at least to
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the minimal earns. All the
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have a right to a dignified life
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so that they would not have a criminal mind.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic disparity
  • propensity
  • recidivism
  • deterrent
  • rehabilitative
  • judicial system
  • corruption
  • socioeconomic
  • alienation
  • stigmatization
  • decriminalization
  • enforcement
  • gentrification
  • preemptive measures
  • intervention strategies
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