Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

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people
think that the internet has influenced as a major negative effect on not only personality but
also
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humanity. I think that it is beneficial to improve social
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in
people
life
although
I agree that it is
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impact on
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. On the one hand, not all social websites are bad for
people
and it can give the way to success in
people
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people
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,
people
who want to be popular or be a blogger
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used most
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the websites like Facebook or Instagram in order to show their talent by uploading videos or pictures.
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, the more
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they get, the more they can
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.
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to,
similarly
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on Facebook in
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Thus
,
people
can try to achieve their success or give their business
information
using these social websites and it is
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that there is
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effect on both community and in
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life of using those networking
sites
.
On the other hand
, there is some disadvantage of using the internet
sites
because it can make harmful to
people
. Some
people
are using Facebook or other social
sites
in order to give unreal
information
and in order to lie in public.
For example
, some media pages describe the wrong
information
about not only the social influencer or other famous actor but
also
furnishing fake news. In
this
way,
people
can not easily believe in each other on social network
sites
that lead to a negative impact on personal and social community. To conclude, though social
sites
are unhelpful for both individual and society, I believe that
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internet
sites
are more advantageous because of developing their social
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which can make
people
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succeed in their life.
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