Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

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think that the internet has influenced as a major negative effect on not only personality but
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humanity. I think that it is beneficial to improve social
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and it can give the way to success in
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who want to be popular or be a blogger
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used most
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the websites like Facebook or Instagram in order to show their talent by uploading videos or pictures.
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they get, the more they can
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most of the private school advertised school
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on Facebook in
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can try to achieve their success or give their business
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using these social websites and it is
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that there is
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effect on both community and in
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life of using those networking
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because it can make harmful to
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are using Facebook or other social
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in order to give unreal
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and in order to lie in public.
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, some media pages describe the wrong
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about not only the social influencer or other famous actor but
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furnishing fake news. In
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can not easily believe in each other on social network
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that lead to a negative impact on personal and social community. To conclude, though social
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are unhelpful for both individual and society, I believe that
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internet
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are more advantageous because of developing their social
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which can make
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succeed in their life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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