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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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In
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 metropolitan world,
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 have a huge impact on consumers.
Although
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 some people believe that commercials have a negative effect on the audience as they are forcing customers to purchase, others think that it is improving their lives. In
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 essay, I will outline why
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 is the case, and why I think that excessive and unnecessary
ads
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 should be unacceptable. Some group of individuals harbours a perspective that
advertisements
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 provide them up to date information regarding new products that will directly impact their lives in a most positive manner. To exemplify, if they come to know about any item that they are really in need of, with the convenience of
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 they come to know about the quality and quantity of that product. But it does not undermine the detrimental results of having too many
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 during television series.
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, some people think that, including me,
ads
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 are more distracting to young generations as they are a most vulnerable group of society because
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 kind of activity puts pressure on them. In the aftermath of
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, it misleads and dominates them easily. Macdonalds,
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, uses popular cartoon characters to promote their Happy meal to young customers.
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, it deliberately makes their parents buy things that they do not have actually in need of. In conclusion, there is no doubt that
advertisements
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 provide the most uncomplicated way to buy things whilst, in my opinion, the excessive tendency of
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 has a deleterious effect on people who are frequently in touch with these
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.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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