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Whoever controls the media also controls opinion and attitudes of the people and there is little that can be done to rectify this. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#controls #media #attitudes #people
Media
 ownership is not a new subject but it matters since it is the deciding factor that determines what people are able to consume, so
this
 gives some support to
this
 claim that whoever controls the
media
 has the power to check over the bias and thoughts. These days, in some countries the
media
 is controlled by its government and one of the most important political priorities for the governments is directing people’s mindsets or adding bias to their certain news depending on their own feelings about the matter by controlling the press.
For example
, in Iran, the press is controlled directly by its leader, so that he could take advantage of
this
 for propaganda purposes to
mindwash
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mind was
 his fans.
As a result
, most of the
Irannians
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Iranians
 do not trust
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public
media
 means that they would rather watch private channels
instead
 of watching national channels, in spite of the government’s efforts to get people’s attention.
On the other hand
, people have the right to receive suitable access to social, political and other information freely and most importantly,
media
 ownership matters to democracy since an informed public is the bedrock of a free and open society. It should
also
 be pointed out that you can control what is printed but you can not control the opinions of your readers. To sum up, the
media
 has an important role in controlling individual’s attitudes, even it can be used as
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 strong psychologic weapon in modern wars. I agree with
this
 assertion and I think the responsibility of tackling
this
 issue is only in the hands of the governments by supporting a totally free press and prevent monopoly control of news and information even if means the government may be criticized.
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