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Recycling is a pointless activity, it is fraught with inefficiency. Governments need to develop policies to tackle waste and other issues at source.

#activity #inefficiency #governments #policies #waste #source
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Contemporary viewpoints often dismiss recycling as an ineffectual practice, failing to significantly benefit the environment
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 urging authorities to seek alternative
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 management strategies. I firmly advocate for a revamped approach to recycling systems, asserting the crucial need for government support and innovation in
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 area. A good reason is , that
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 system should be developed , is high cost and has negative impacts on our Earth
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 recycling.
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, in most countries , there is not an accurate plan , on how to cope with garbage in their countries. That's why litters are sent by ships overseas. By transporting to these countries , ships pollute the water of the ocean and kill many species of fish and other creatures.
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, there exist organisations, that make money from illegal
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 and organized criminals for whom
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 traffic is almost as profitable as human trafficking. Another point to consider is that the economy will have positive consequences
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 recycling .By finding solutions how to deal with litter in a country, it would create new jobs, because people who can do the necessary work will be needed in new enterprises.
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, local economies will profit from it and the level of unemployment will decrease. In essence, the importance of recycling cannot be overstated in safeguarding our planet's future. Enhancements in recycling technology hold the promise of improved
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 sorting and processing efficiencies, fostering a more cost-effective and sustainable approach. By addressing the existing inefficiencies, these advancements have the potential to mitigate environmental harm and contribute significantly to the preservation of our ecosystem for generations to come.
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