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Happiness is considered to be very important in life, yet it is difficult to define. Why is happiness difficult to define? What factors are important for achieving happiness?

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It is true that
happiness
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 is very important in life.
However
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, there is no clear definition of
happiness
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, because there are multiple factors that we need to take into consideration when we talk about
happiness
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.
Happiness
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 is difficult to define
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 because
people
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 feel happy in different situations, and the definition of
happiness
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 varies from
person
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 to
person
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. Some
people
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 might think being rich and having higher social status could make them happy, while others believe that wealth and social status is not essentially associated with
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, and being together with friends and families means
happiness
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. For an individual, the definition of
happiness
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 may change as he or she grows older as well. When I was young, I thought that having a stable job with high compensation would make me happy. Now I am working as an engineer for a big tech company,earning a good salary, yet I feel I am not happy. To become an engineer, I gave up my dream of becoming a musician. I feel I would be happier if I had chosen what I love to do.
Although
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happiness
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 is hard to define, there are several factors that are to be considered to achieve
happiness
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.
First
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 of all, I believe having a stable income is important. To be happy, it might not be necessary to be rich or wealthy, but a
person
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 would definitely be unhappy if he or she is suffering from poverty and could not afford his housing and food.
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, moral and emotional support
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 contribute to the feeling of
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. Most
people
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 would not be happy when they feel lonely.
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 yet the most importantly, doing what you love to do.
People
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 might have different preferences of what they would like to do in life, but
people
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 would be happy when they are doing what they like to do. In conclusion, each
person
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 has his or her own feeling towards
happiness
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, and
this
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 is why
happiness
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 is hard to define, but there are certain factors that most
people
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 need to think about in order to be happy.
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