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Reducing global environment damage should be handled by governments rather than individuals. To what extent agree or disagree?

#environment #damage #governments #individuals
Amid the currently emergent setbacks that harm our society is
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global warming, bringing within the discussion if
this
 issue must be handled by the Union rather than individuals. In the paragraphs below
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 trend will be discussed before concluding an agreement or disagreement. On the one hand, the government must have a main role when it comes to environment content
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 since they pursue the necessary income to act and implement measures in a larger aspect.
For instance
, despite the indigenous actions to protect the nature and animal species from logging practitioners, the power to tax or imprison these individuals is exclusive from the government entities.
Thus
, undoubtedly, the federal, state and city agencies must deal with these issues. In stark contrast, protecting our
nature
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 resources and fighting to reduce damages to the environment must be a personal responsibility from each one as well, and the individual power to change
this
cenario
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scenario
 must not be underestimated. To illustrate
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, in 2019, dozens of Brazilian beaches were contaminated by oil. In spite of the fact that the disaster had been noticed in international media, the current government were not
taking
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 the decisions to settle the issue, which mobilized the population to collect the oil puddles and avoid more wild animals from getting intoxicated.
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, the population can
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 act in favour to diminish the damage caused
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 anthropic activity.
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