Financial education should be a mandatory component of the school program. To what extent do u agree or disagree with the statement.

A common knowledge everyone is supposed to have these days for a
successfull
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successful
living is their understanding on
money
earnings and expenditure.
On the contrary
, the issue of whether
the
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financial
education
need
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to be
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included
during their schooling or at a later stage has been raising a lot of debates.In my opinion,I agree
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the fact that financial
education
should be included at their early stage.
To begin
with, Financial
education
has a lot of benefits to every individual and their family.The knowledge greatly helps him to have a high standard of living.
Firstly
,if
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children
childrens
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children
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are given the
education
, they learn at an early stage the various expenses they make and means to save their
money
.
For example
, kids would know the worth of every product they have been gifted by their parents and relatives and use them in
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effective manner.
Secondly
, they become broad-minded and understand quickly that to be fearless and happy, they need to be aware of various investment methods
such
that even if one fails they know how to survive.
On the other hand
,not being trained
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the financial sector can at times be
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helpful
unhelpful
.Teenagers and adults would become less
money
minded and focus more
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human kindness.
For example
, If someone plans to buy a gift for their
friends
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marriage , without a
money
aspect he/she would not merely think of gifting based on value ,
on the
contrary
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the gift would be selected by their likingness.
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Additionally
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,
such
people happen to be more caring and
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as they
dont
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don't
have much pressure or goals about making more
money
unlike
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their peers or friends. In conclusion, though there are both pros and cons ,
but
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the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.Giving a fair
education
about finance to everyone will be a betterment to everyone as long as they
dont
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don't
get carried away with
money
aspects alone.
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