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Some people think that space exploration is waste of resources, while others think that it is essential for mankind to continue to explore the universe in which we live. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #space #exploration #waste #resources #mankind #universe
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There are many arguments that exploring
space
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 demands huge funds and time,
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 it should be used to mitigate the woes of people. Developed countries
plays
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 a vital role in bringing prosperity among other poor
nations
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. Since poor
nations
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 have significant complications related to health employment and education. A prime example is
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underdeveloped
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under developed
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underdeveloped
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 countries that could not provide basic necessities to
its
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 citizens like food, shelter and clothes.
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Hance
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 it is necessary to satisfy the primitive needs
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, funds should be invested
for
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 the exploration of
space
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 as it is crucial to
attain
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 the knowledge of the universe where we live in. The investigation of
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 and the reach
of
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beyond of earth’s atmosphere acquired information not only to increase the knowledge of
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, to benefits humanity in many ways. plays a vital role in bringing prosperity among other poor
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. Since poor
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 have significant complications related to health employment and education. Humans in
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 century are enjoying
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technology because engineers in the
space
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 sectors develop new cutting-edge technologies to accomplish the goals of making products that we use
everyday
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in
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earth
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. Air purifiers, vacuum cleaner, telecommunication, weather forecast to name a few. To conclude, even a fraction of money spent annually on
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 exploration could save
million
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 of people in
poverty
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stricken-countries
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. On that account, we must priorities the needs of our human race.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • astronomical costs
  • earthbound issues
  • tangible benefits
  • technological spin-offs
  • innovation
  • long-term investment
  • habitability
  • interplanetary travel
  • sustainable exploration
  • spacefaring nations
  • international collaboration
  • deep space
  • the final frontier
  • cosmic perspective
  • frontiers of science
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