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UK and International students gaining second class degrees or better (2009)

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The bar chart show compares the
percentage
 of International undergraduates and the
percentage
 of UK undergraduates receiving
second
 level degrees or higher at a major university in
UK
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 in 2009. According to the
graph
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 there
is
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 eight specializations. The
percentage
 of
students
 in both categories have a
similarly
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 result in
specialization
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such
 a Nursing and Accountancy, over three quarters approximately in
first
 and exactly 60% in the
second
. The higher
percentage
 of local UK
students
 in the Art history and Sociology, both of these professions have an 80%
percent
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, whereas International
students
 peak in Information technology, nearly 82-83%.
Least
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 value of international learner in International Law, with a
percentage
such
 42-43% roughly, while local learners result is in International Technology with a result less 60%.
Also
,
most
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 visible difference in all of
this
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 crafts in International Law, the difference is more than 30% Overall, the graph shows that British
students
 are more successful in the humanities than international
students
, but international
students
 are successful in more technical sciences.
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