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The world is experiencing a dramatic increase in population, which is causing problems not only for poor, undeveloped countries, but also for developed countries. Describe problems of overpopulation and give at least one possible solution.

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Today we are observers of the
population
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 increasing all over the world. Though lack of the
population
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 has
problems
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, increasing dramatically of it has it's
problems
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 as well. Some experts believe that
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 increasing the
population
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 might have some advantages and benefits for thinly populated
countries
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,
overpopulation
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 has many
problems
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 for either developed and undeveloped
countries
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.
Overpopulation
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 in developed
countries
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 makes the duties of government more difficult.
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, providing enough food or maybe water for drinking and personal usage, preparing accommodation for all
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, building an appropriate residence for them, controlling transportation, taking care of them against different diseases, offering a job for
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, arresting the murders and thieves, etc. The
problems
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 of
overpopulation
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 are more difficult and harder for undeveloped and poor
countries
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 because life is very hard for
people
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 in these
countries
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 naturally and their government generally can'
t
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 meet the needs of
people
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,
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,
overpopulation
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 makes life in these
countries
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 much harder and the society becomes poorer and poorer. Overall, there are some solutions for controlling the
population
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 one of them is: every country should have an obvious plan for the number of their
population
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 and limitations of it for now, near future and long run which is called
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 controlling politics.
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, the government should inform the families about
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 plan widely. To sum up, if
countries
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 don'
t
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 have a persistent control and don'
t
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 control the number of their
population
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, they will face several
problems
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 and if they can'
t
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 handle the
problems
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, life becomes much difficult for
people
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 in these
countries
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