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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience.

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In our modern world,taking a
gap
year
beccoming
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becoming
 a new trend.Many universities encourage young
people
 to take a break time to figure out exactly what they want to study.It can be
difficul
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difficult
 to make
such
 a serious decision, when everyone has a different opinion,while others believe
this
 period is a perfect time to think about your personal and long-term goals,broaden
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,develop
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Of course
,there are advantages and disadvantages you should consider about.You can get several benefits by taking a
gap
year
. I believe that it's a great opportunity to explore the world and discover new countries. Students learn phrases from a foreign language and try previously
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 customs and traditions. Another point  is that
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 you time to think about the right career you would want to follow. It may help young
people
 change their lifestyle,make new friends, widen their hobbies and personal interests.Often,
people
 are becoming more mature .
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problems you should analyze
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when
 deciding to take a
gap
year
.One of the main 
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 is money.Your parents  can not support you financially and you have to pay for a trip,hotel
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if you planning to travel.Many students feel difficult to start education after a long break and it
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 boring to continuing their study again.
Also
,during the rest
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 some
people
 risk
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 their academic mindset and
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 they had when there were before an universitet. In conclusion,a
gap
year
 can provide young
people
 with unique experiences in the future,which they will remember and appreciate for life.Despite
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all disadvantages, I agree that taking a break is
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 great idea.But you need to weigh
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 and cons
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this
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  • immersive experience
  • perspectives
  • empathy
  • societal norms
  • practical understanding
  • motivation
  • networking
  • recharge
  • dedication
  • forge meaningful relationships
  • financial independence
  • emotional well-being
  • self-confidence
  • adaptability
  • open-minded
  • mentorships
  • motivated
  • prepared
  • volunteering
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