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Some people believe that volunteer work should be a requirement for teenagers in high schools (for instance working for a charity). To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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In recent times, the need to find valuable
work
experience
 and to keep teenagers busy is an issue all over the world. Nowadays, it is believed by some that an obligatory volunteer program for high schoolers is a solution for
this
 issue. It is in my opinion, through these programmes’ adolescents would find appreciate their community more, develop invaluable
work
experience
 and improve their social skills.
Firstly
, youngsters would find an appreciation for their community, which they would not have seen
otherwise
 through
this
 program.
For instance
, a student would take pride in
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 what they accomplished if they completed a job cleaning graffiti or helping organize a community event, and
as a
result
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 they would feel more appreciative of their neighbourhood.
Secondly
, since these students responsible for their
work
 duties, they will gain invaluable
work
experience
.
For example
, if a student is coaching a team sport, they will be in charge of other children, being responsible for their well-being, resulting in gaining
experience
 in leadership and organization.
Lastly
,
although
high
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 school can be an isolating
experience
, volunteer
work
 could allow them to socialize more with others.
This
 can be accomplished while a student is doing activities,
such
 as working on team projects or speaking with others to complete their
work
 duties, which would lead to a more extroverted individual. In conclusion, teenagers would discover a love for their neighbourhood, gained valuable skills, and improve their social abilities.
Therefore
, it is in my opinion that all high schools ought to include
this
 program in their curriculum, as it would benefit the youth and ultimately benefit society.
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