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it is often claimed that electronic devices will soon replace paper books. Do you agree or disagree?

#devices #paper #books
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Undoubtedly, technology has touched every sphere of life and
education
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 sector is not an exception. Many people believe that
computers
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 and other gadgets will
takeover
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 the role of printed
books
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 and articles completely. Despite plenty of material is available in electronic form, I do not think that
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use
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the use
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 of paper material for reading would come to an end due to its accessibility to everyone and no detrimental effect on
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eyes
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the eyes
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.
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.
Computers
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always
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aways
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always
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 need charging after a specific time if they are to b used for
longer
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 period but there is no
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 condition in paper articles and magazines. A reader can
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 them for as much time as he wants.
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, it is not possible for everyone to own an electronic device in
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 world countries where
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the majority
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 of the population is impoverished.
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,
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use
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the use
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 of
books
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 is more feasible in
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 kind of situations and because of
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 reason, paper material can never become fully unpopular.
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, reading magazines and articles does not put any negative impact on
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eyes
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the eyes
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 of
reader
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the reader
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 whereas using laptops or
computers
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 for
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person
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a person
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 with sensitive
eyes
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. LED screens used these days discharge radiations which can cause irritation in
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eyes
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the eyes
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 or adversely affect
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 of users.
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 why individuals generally prefer
books
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 over electronic gadgets. To conclude,
although
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computers
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 have a lot of benefits still they cannot replace printed material because of ease of
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, affordability and suitability for
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eyes
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the eyes
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.
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