Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

A healthy country is a wealthy country. Free
health
treatment should be provided in all
nations
in the world
inlcuding
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including
the latest advanced medical service. It is agreed that some of the medical
treatments
are so expensive but
goverments
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governments
government
should introduce free service
health
plans for
people
and I totally agree that all countries should implement
this
.
To begin
with, it is purely government responsibility to build healthy societies in their
nations
as it is commonly believed that healthier localities can contribute to
nations
growth in terms of taxes.
In other words
, when
people
are good and fit
then
only they participate in revenue generation.
For example
, when governments collect money in terms of the tax,
then
it
the
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the duty of the nation
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nations
duty to safe
gaurd
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guard
their public. Nowadays, there is so much
of
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advancement in
the
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medical treatment but many of them are limited to corporate hospitals. Big countries like China and India have more poor
people
and they are very far from the government medical policies. And in well-developed
contries
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countries
also
many
health
treatments
are so expensive and not
accesible
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accessible
to all.
For instance
,
treatments
such
as heart and brain diseases are too costly,
thus
,
people
who are rich can pay for those
treatments
and for
poor
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it is nightmare.
Hence
,
health
departments of each country should think of these and make
helath
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health
policies
such
that the
health
care systems
accepts
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all common
people
and
that is
the only way every citizen contributes to their
nation
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growth. To conclude, even though it is very difficult to provide free
health
service for each citizen of their nation, all countries must prepare a
well integrated
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and organized
health-care
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system so that even the poor
people
can get the benefit of
such
medical plans. And
this
is the best way to make their citizens healthy.
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