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Nowadays in many countries traditional customs are less popular than in the past. Do you agree or disagree? What can parents and teachers do about this?

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These days in numerous usual rituals are less in demand when compared to the olden days. I personally agree that
people
 are not following old traditions because
people
 are far away from their local place and so busy with their work as well as latest trends
such
 as night parties, fast foods, and regular shopping. In
this
 essay, I will state my reasons for my view in
this
 situation.
Firstly
,
people
 are moving from their home place to another city or country for their jobs.
Also
, they are getting better opportunities for their jobs because of globalisation.
For example
, according to the latest survey from India,
last
 year,10 lacs of
people
 has been withdrawn their Indian citizenship.
Secondly
,
people
 are occupying the latest trends
such
 as pub, social networking websites, and fashions.
Furthermore
,
people
 lifestyle has been changed because of advanced technology so
people
 are addicting city lifestyles to spend life more than contact person physically.
For example
,in a recent survey by a famous channel, 80 per cent of
people
 is not sticking to old fashions because of modern lifestyles.
Thus
, traditional rituals are less in demand because latest fashions. Parents can provide their children with their
customs
 from childhood onwards. So they should strictly follow where they live and
also
 move forward with their children.
Besides
, teachers can be educated for students for their culture and
customs
 and strictly making an order from school management. In conclusion, the traditional rules are less useful because of modern lifestyles and globalisation. Guardians should make a habit for their children for their native culture and
customs
.
Also
, teachers are providing a detailed explanation of our rituals to students in the class.
However
, some
people
 are still following traditional
customs
 and
also
 doing campaigns for young
people
 to know the value of old culture.
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