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Advertisements are becoming more and more common in everyday life. Is it a positive or negative development?

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the issue of whether advertisements are becoming more popular nowadays has been raising a lot of debates. Some might say that the activity of introducing products to the public is a positive development because it brings a lot of benefit to people's lives.
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, others insist on the opinion that it is a negative trend caused by annoyance and the quality of the brand are usually overrated. Viewing from a general perspective, I personally agree with the former opinion for the following reasons.
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 with, the growth of advertising is supposed to be an advantage for improving inhabitants’ life.
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, the customers can open their knowledge about items which they want to buy through classified ads or commercial breaks and they have more choice to make about their beloved products.
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, a human who wants to buy a television can consult the digital information and the advantage of
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 item through video or ads in the social media or show adverts and make their decision what is suitable for them.
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, advertising generates a diversity of employment which helps workers have the income to pay their living costs.
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, it provides occupations for artist, painter, editor, content or ideas for advertisements which bring money to workers to improve their life.
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, the development of advertising contributed to people's enhancement of comfort and diversity in shopping and standard living by income from working.
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, some of the population think that it is a negative influence because advertisements sometimes are annoying when they appear all over the place with a high density from street to social media,
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 the quality of the goods is often overrated which makes customers disappointed.
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, with regular appearances on the internet, advertising helps consumers update information about the goods better. In conclusion, promotion of items to the public has some drawbacks
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 as wasting of money or making customers feel bothered but it is a good trend for the development by supplying a benefit to inform products and open the job opportunities for people so that advertisement is a positive.
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