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Many people think it is very important to protect the environment but they make no effort to do it themselves. Why do you think this is the case? What actions should individuals take to protect the environment?

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Global
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The global
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 environment is
detrimenting
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detrimental
detriment
 at an
alarm
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 rate in
this
 contemporary world. The majority of people feel that it is
utmost
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an utmost
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 priority to safeguard
the
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nature
, but no one comes forward to do it. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the important reason behind
this
phenominon
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phenomenon
 and the possible actions that an individual can initiate to save
the
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mother
nature
. A lot of members in society would be ready to speak on the importance of
nature
 protection,
however
, when the
practicle
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practical
practice
 situation comes regarding contribution they would take a step back. To be more precise, every individual feels that the community surroundings protection is
government's
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 responsibility. The litter spread on roads,
for instance
, will not be cleared by any citizen,
moreover
, they feel the whole responsibility lies on the government. These behaviours have caused
a
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greater damage to
environment
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the environment
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 in the form of
water
, land & air pollutions respectively. Everyone's contribution
in
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 saving
the
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nature
 is the need of the hour absolutely.
On the other hand
, there are several actions that can be initiated by every responsible person. The primary one being, banning plastic usage across nations to save
water
 and land contamination. Due to the non-degradable
nature
 of plastic,
for example
, all
water
 bodies are polluted to cause the extinction of aquatic animals. Adding to
this
, encouraging
the
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green energy production and utilization helps to reduce
the
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fossil-fuel consumptions substantially. If
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the roof
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roof top
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rooftop
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 of every house is installed with
the
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solar energy panels which are available at a subsidised rate,
for example
, will eventually reduce
water
 and coal consumption
that is
 used to generate the electricity. To conclude, while the majority of society members feel that
the
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nature
 protection is
utmost
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 important aspect at any point in time, no one makes any efforts to participate. I think the important reason for
this
 cause is
accountability
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the accountability
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 of citizens.
However
, there are remedial actions like plastic usage control and
increase
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 in
green house
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greenhouse
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 energies production
will
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that will
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 save
environment
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the environment
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 from the global warming.
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