Throughout history, people have dreamed of living in a perfect society, but they have not agreed on what an ideal society would be like. What do you think is the most important element of a perfect society in this modern world? How can people work towards achieving an ideal society?

Nowadays, a great deal of attention has been paid to an ideal
society
.
However
, some
people
insist it is almost impossible to have one agreed idea of it. In
this
essay, I am going to discuss the essential
element
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of a perfect
society
from my perspective and examine how to achieve
it
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them
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.
To begin
with, I believe that a perfect city is where every member of
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society
have equal rights to pursue their dreams and develop potentials.
For example
, every youngster should have equal rights to
recieve
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receive
enough education. In fact, one in seven youngsters
live
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under
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the
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poverty in Japan.
Nevertheless
, they are not inferior to others,
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they
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the
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they
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are disrespected and work for unstable occupations,
such
as part-time jobs.
Likewise
,
gender
equality must be achieved.
People
should not be judged by their
gender
, and men and women should receive equal payments for equal tasks. On top of that, there are two ways to achieve
this
,
Firstly
,
people
have better create more places where the younger generations can study without money.
For instance
,
a
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NPO called
KATARIBA
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KATARINA
in Japan provides free educational opportunities for children to solve educational inequality.
Furthermore
, it is
also
effective to prepare more scholarships.
In addition
to
this
,
gender
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the gender
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gap is often seen
at
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workplace
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the workplace
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.
Hence
promoting changes at
office
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the office
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may be effective.
For example
, the number of female managers should be increased, because men dominant at present. To conclude, I believe
people
have equal rights in a perfect
society
, including education and
gender
equality. To achieve
this
, promoting free education and encouraging women in
workplace
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the workplace
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are
vital
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a vital
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factor.
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