In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes here. What is your opinion about this?
Some humans opine that constructing homes in the countryside is not suitable, as it may distort the natural environment. Whilst others think that
due to
the necessity for new houses, they want to build them in available rural areas. I completely agree with the idea of building houses in the villages as it will be beneficial to individuals in many ways. Linking Words
This
essay Linking Words
further
discusses the advantages for people that they can get by having a home built on the outskirts of the city.
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To begin
with, fresh air free from pollution is vital to lead a healthy life for anyone in society. Having accommodations constructed in rural locations allows them to take advantage of the pure atmosphere without any chemical particles in the air. Linking Words
In addition
, individuals need not suffer any health-related diseases Linking Words
due to
a clean environment. Linking Words
For example
, medical researchers published a journal stating that individuals living in the countryside tend to have a longer life span than those living in cities and the main reason behind Linking Words
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is pollution-free surroundings.
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Furthermore
, building houses in rural areas eventually leads to the development of villages by providing access to more facilities than in the past. Linking Words
This
in turn paves the way to construct schools, hospitals, bus stations, and railway tracks. Linking Words
Thus
, people get to enjoy the lifestyle and no longer need to suffer going longer distances for anything. Linking Words
For instance
, when I lived in a remote area during my childhood, it was very hard for me to get to a school which was 25 miles away from my home. Linking Words
Moreover
, there was no proper mode of transport to get to school during those times. No roads were constructed Linking Words
due to
poor transportation systems. In recent times, I see that my village has more transport facilities than before owing to a huge number of family, town, and detached homes constructed in the area. Linking Words
Also
, a hospital was built in the neighbourhood to meet the people’s emergency needs.
In conclusion, despite having the concern about protecting the countryside by not building residences, it has proved to be effective for humans who constructed dwellings in rural spaces Linking Words
along with
leading a healthy and long-living life. I believe that humans should take advantage of rural areas by having their homes built in and enjoy a less polluted environment thereby developing the place where they live.Linking Words
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coherence cohesion
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Word Count
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