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Parents should be held legally responsible for their children's act. What is your opinion?

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Guardians
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 must be answerable to the deeds of their young ones; there must be proper legislation so that everything can be kept in order. There are many justifications
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 phenomenon, while it has its own pros and cons. I believe that
parents
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 should be liable for some actions of
children
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 but an age limit must
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 be defined in the law.
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 with, there are many reasons for holding
parents
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 responsible for adolescents' act. Bringing up
children
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 is the sole duty of
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, so they must take ownership of their deeds as well.
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, if a child is doing something wrong and the
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 probably commit a serious mistake in his/her nurture, they must be accountable their wrongdoing rather than the child. In most countries,
parents
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 are authorities in
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's matters
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 as consents for treatment and other legal issues
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 why
guardians
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 should have responsibility. Regarding the impacts, the positives and negative outcomes of
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 development are comparable.
Parents
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 have maximum interaction with their
children
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, so they would stress them to refrain from wrongdoing, which ultimately decreases the crime rate in society.
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, the
children
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 who have criminal attitudes
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can create serious troubles for their
parents
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, in that ,case the whole family would suffer.
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, if a naughty child damages the property in his/her neighbourhood,
guardians
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 need to pay compensation for that. In conclusion, I think that even though troublemaker
children
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 can cause embarrassments for their
parents
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 in
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 phenomena, it is the best way to keep
children
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 discipline.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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