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: For some people, making a lot of money is an important goal. Others think that their free time is more important than wealth. Which is more important to you? Explain, giving specific reasons for your choice.

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Different
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 have different goals. While to some
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 gives joy to the rest, spending quality
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 with their family and self-improvement does.
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 decision is not necessarily to be based on reasons but should depend on the individual's thought process. I see the difference of opinion as a healthy argument. In the following essay, I will write on when and why
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 make varied choices in picking their lifestyle. Folks are highly influenced by society and their social lives have an impact on their lifestyle. In reality, some
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 earn
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 by working day and night and buy expensive items. These pretentious
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 do not live for themselves,
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 live for the
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 they are surrounded by. Businessmen especially, toil themselves to be wealthy and their thirst to quench
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 doest not fade even during moments of crisis.
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, recent news in Australia stated a young restaurant manager keeping his kitchen open to the public even during extreme weather conditions of the Paho cyclone. Expensive cars, luxury items, overpriced vehicles are things that give them happiness. And, they seem to be joyous in spending the hard-earned
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 to live life like a king. These folks worry less about their future and concentrate on the present.
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 to the aforementioned facts, there is a group of
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 who value their
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 and relationship more than
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. These
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 love to spend
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 with their families and always find a reason to stay connected with their surroundings. They believe it is wise to learn new things, explore opportunities and expand their knowledge in their free
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.
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 leads them to be multi-talented and they learn new skills, from archery to culinary. When the world runs behind
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 round the clock,
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 crowd focuses on self-healing and self-improvement activities. They are more worried about their future and always work on planning it. To conclude, we live in a country where everyone is given the freedom and independence to live their lives according to their taste.
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, I am biased and more aligned towards
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 who are not materialistic in nature. I think they are the ones who would be able to overcome any difficulties, as they are taught on living life to the fullest.
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