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Todays teenagers have more stressful lives than previous generations. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

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Many people believe that
teenagers
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 nowadays have more stressful lives than before. As far as I am concerned, At the present stage children should help their
parents
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 at home with general works.
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, in the following essay, elaborate my viewpoints with relevant examples.
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, these days
teenagers
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 are using a lot of social media and facing pressure.
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,
this
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 current lifestyle for most children prefers to use the
internet
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 for games till late nights in separate bedrooms without
parents
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 permission.
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,
teenagers
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 having too much tension because of the modern
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 world and these days youngster using the
internet
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 most of the
time
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 rather than do some physical activities.
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,
this
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internet
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 will bad effects on juvenile in the future, as they might get sick because of their less sleep.
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, if youth will do some outside activities
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 they will get healthier and stress-free.
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, most children are more open with their
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 to make better relationships.
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, in the current
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 youth are open-minded to share things with their family members to solve small problems. ,
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 they are getting good trust in the relationship with families, as a juvenile is educated in modern practical studies.
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, as far as
teenagers
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 do not have much to do with their
parents
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.
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, if youngsters will obey their
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 and follow the right path
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 they may get more successful in the life with the relationship.
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, they do not have stress as they have more facilities are available like gadgets, entertainments source.
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, they are full of stress-free and spending a great
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 with friends, nowadays most of the kids have their own laptops or mobiles to spend on movies and games. To conclude, youngsters nowadays have more stress in their lives than past, as
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society puts extra pressure on them to
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 well in their studies, but at the same
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, due to having more
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this
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 task can be carried out easily.
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, in my opinion, youth lives are equally balanced and not stressed in
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today's
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 world.
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